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有冇英文勁人在呀...幫我批改下以下文章丫...唔該

[size=medium]幫我睇下有冇串錯字...錯標點...或者文法錯..
份工課星期五要交喇...好重要傢..占10%學分傢...

In about 200words,describe your personality,you are type A or type B?

Type A peopleare ambitious,aggressive and competitive.
Type B are the opposite. they are relaxed and easygoing..

I think I am a B type person,Because I never anxious tomorrow,I always expects the best.Relatives, I trust a contented mind is a perpetual feast, that's whyI bosom the mood which feels grateful to pass every day. I always remind my-self failure is the mother of success when i meet up some frustrsted metter,I think while there is life there is hope.
**In my spare time,I always do voluntary work,My mother always teach me Blessed are those who donate,I believe give to the world the best you have and the best will come back to you.
**At weekends,I often chat with my friends.Sometimes,I have heavy hearted,I should share with them to make release,On the other hand
,I rarely do some exercise,do some exercise will benefit abate pressured.
**During holidays,I usually accompany my husband and our daughter to do some gardening.We like gardening very much,My husband consider gardening can acquired good character.
**Finaly ,I so proud of my personality belong to type B.

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Re: 有冇英文勁人在呀...幫我批改下以下文章丫...唔該

我英文麻麻地，改得幾多得幾多好唔好？

, Because I never anxious tomorrow

, because I never worry about the future.

I always expects the best.

I always expect for the best.

Relatives, I trust...

Relatively, I think...

I always remind my-self failure ...

I always remind myself that failure...

...when i meet up some frustrsted metter,I think while ther is life there is hope.

...when I face frustration, I will tell myself that there is always hope in life.

我唔肯定我咁寫一定啱，請各位指正﹗

後面嗰啲好亂好難改，睇吓有冇其他人幫到你。不過我估你最好先check吓spelling，好多錯字﹗Fullstop之後要隔兩個空位，coma之後隔一個，跟住個字唔駛大寫。

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Re: 有冇英文勁人在呀...幫我批改下以下文章丫...唔該

童話:Thankyou 呀....spelling 我會check 傢喇...我typeing
好差傢....我諗我打錯好多字呀...

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好媽媽勳章

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Re: 有冇英文勁人在呀...幫我批改下以下文章丫...唔該

我英文唔勁,但你可以咁樣得唔得:
Being a B-type person, I always have a positive mind and look for the best so I feel grateful each day.

I love doing the voluntary work in my spare time and my mother always teach me it’s a blessing to be a giver, and I do believe people deserve to have the good things after all the nice things they have done for others.

I chat with my friends most of the time on the weekend as it’s a good way to release the inner pressure since I don’t do exercise that often.

Normally my family will get together for gardening during weekends as my husband found gardening as a best tool to train one’s patience

春有百花秋有月夏有涼風冬有雪若無閒事掛心頭便是人間好時節

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Re: 有冇英文勁人在呀...幫我批改下以下文章丫...唔該

你這文章是那科的功課? 不是英文科吧?!

講真, 你篇英文好多mistake, 直頭係港式英文, 如要改就一定要大改.....仲麻煩過作篇新的啊!

如果你不是英文科功課的話,而批閱的人是香港人, 其實唔駛介意d 英文寫得好唔好, 一般來說, 批改的人睇得明你講咩就ok, 唔會因為你d英文水平扣分的, 放心。